Phone Behind Bars

Anybody else get the security warning when trying to download?

this game is NTR isn't it???

Hi man! I loved your game - How much time did you spend to create this game? Thanks you in advance.

Amm... Hi. The character limit in Discord makes it difficult to provide detailed feedback, so I’m writing it here instead. I suggest creating a new channel in your Discord server specifically for feedback, without character limitations. This would make it easier for players to share their thoughts in detail and help you gather more actionable items for improving your game.

Feedback:

I just finished playing your game on Android, and I wanted to share some honest feedback. While I understand that this is an early-access title, there are several issues that significantly hinder the experience. I hope this critique helps you improve the game and move it in a better direction.

1. The Story

The story is one of the game’s weakest points. The pacing is awkward, the events feel forced and unnatural, and the overall narrative lacks cohesion or believability. As an adult game, it’s neither engaging nor erotic, which is disappointing. The NTR element feels like it’s there just for the sake of being NTR, rather than a natural development of the story. It lacks depth and purpose, which makes it frustrating rather than compelling.

2. Length and Writing

The story is extremely short. I understand this is an early release, but it took me about an hour to finish, and most of that time was spent enduring poorly written dialogue. The pacing is uneven, and the narrative feels rushed and underdeveloped.

3. Characters

The characters are another major issue. None of them are likable or relatable. Everyone comes across as morally questionable, and the protagonist is particularly weak in character and unremarkable. He’s easily manipulated, lacks agency, and has no redeeming qualities that would make a player want to root for him.

His wife and her child are portrayed as overly promiscuous without any depth or nuance, and Bella's infatuation with the MC feels baseless and unrealistic. There’s no meaningful backstory or context to ground any of the characters, which makes the entire cast feel flat and unconvincing. And the worst of them is Jesse, the MC's best friend.

4. Tone and Setting

The tone of the game is inconsistent. Despite the MC being in prison, none of the characters (including him!) seem to acknowledge or take the situation seriously. Instead, the narrative dives straight into adult content, which feels jarring and out of place. It comes across like a stereotypical and shallow adult film plot (e.g., "pizza delivery man meets a horny girl"). This undermines any potential for an immersive or engaging experience.

5. Patreon Paywalls

The way you’ve implemented the Patreon paywall is off-putting. Blocking parts of the game with a code feels scummy and disrupts the flow of the game. While I personally had no trouble obtaining the code, the process is frustrating and unnecessary. It leaves a bad impression, especially for a game that’s in its infancy and struggling to find its footing.

My suggestion is to avoid releasing a version of the game that requires a code to the public. Instead, provide a full version to your patrons through Discord or Patreon directly, and release a free, unrestricted version to the public that offers a glimpse of the game without hitting a paywall or releasing the full game after one month of the patrons having it. 

Your game is still in the early stages, and it shows. However, the approach you’re taking—both with the paywall and the overall quality of the game—makes it difficult to justify supporting it. To build a loyal player base and gain support, focus on improving the quality of the story, characters, and overall writing. Avoid using tactics that make you look like a scumy developer just looking to milk patrons.

I understand the importance of financial support for developers, and I’ve supported others who’ve earned my trust because their games feel worth it. They create products that are polished and engaging, and they come across as genuine and passionate about their work—not just about the money.

I hope you take this feedback as an opportunity to improve. I want to see this game succeed, but it has a long way to go.

Hi, I noticed that the Android version doesn’t enter full-screen mode upon opening. As a result, the navigation buttons at the bottom of the screen interfere with the in-game icons, which can be quite frustrating.

Can someone comment on my comment when the Android version comes out?

will the extra chapters that require patreon code get released to public later?